My story:
I woke up to screaming in the lounge. I sigh thinking my younger sisters are just playing with their toys but then i heard tiny cry's. I got up and ran to the lounge. I saw both of my sisters curled up into balls. I lightly tap on them both ‘Where's phoenix?’ I ask. They both pointed at the fireplace. I look at the fireplace thinking ‘didn't mom light the fire before i went to sleep?’ ‘I-in there’ they both say i laughed thinking it was a joke ‘don't be silly!’ I start to walk to the fireplace. I crouch and slowly go into the fireplace.
I look up. All I could see was the black sky and the shiny stars. ‘See? She's not there. Now tell me where she really is’ lily opens her mouth but nothing comes out. I look at ruby and she says ‘S-something took her and now she's gone..’ I looked at her thinking she was imagining things so I asked her ‘what took her? Do you know what I did?’ she looked at me with frightened eyes ‘N-no all we saw was a black hand reach for her’ I started to think ‘Oh.. mom told me a story about this before this is not good..’ I look at them both ‘look i will be back.. Okay?’ ‘okay they both say’ i start to walk to mom's room ‘M-mom phoenix was taking apparently.
And ruby said she only saw black hands reaching for her then she was gone.. Do you know what’s going on..?’ She quickly gets up ‘lock the doors now!’ ‘Why..?’ i ask ‘Just do it!!’ she yells. I ran to the front door with the keys and I quickly locked the door and the door to the fireplace ‘Done..’ I say. She points at the door ‘go and check on your sisters’ I run back to the living room I hear a high pitched scream and I saw Ruby fly across the room it all happened too fast so i had no idea what took her. Lily started sobbing as I had to board up the windows ‘OW!’ I yell as I hardly hit my finger with the hammer. I carry on in huge pain. I see lily run through the door to the hallway ‘LILY COME BACK!!’ I yell over the top of my lungs.
She comes back with a roll of bandage ‘lily.. You don't have to..’ she drops it on the ground ‘HEY!!’ i yell. She looks up at me in anger ‘ Im not-scared-anymore…’ he j-just wants to play I scream as i see her pick up a pair of scissors I fall to the ground as everything goes pitch black. I wake up ‘ow’ i say as i feel hitting my head on something. I hear a loud pitched scream then i started crawling out into the light I look at what i was under ‘ are you kidding me somebody put me under the bed!?’ I look at my hand it was wrapped up in band aid. I touch my chest ‘OW’ i yell in pain ‘Wait that feels like that was wrapped up in band aid too. I start to walk into a hallway that i have never walked in before somebody comes out of a room. ‘ oh! Your awake! ‘ the prison says ‘who are you?’ i say in a frightened voice. ‘I will tell you later’ she says ‘for now you need to stay with me.’ she says sadly ‘B-but my sisters’ ‘Im sorry but you need to.’
Nikita, see! A talented writer.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you are good at adding detail so the reader can begin to create a picture in their head. You are good at expressing yourself this way.
DeleteThank you miss! I actually let my head plan the story first then I pretty much write it down. I had no idea that it was going to turn out like this!.
Delete-Nikita